Shuumatsu’s Synopsis

Hello everyone,

It has come to my attention that my synopsis for Shuumatsu apparently makes it sound like a generic battle harem LN. I think this is turning a lot of people away and may deter them from giving the anime a try, which obviously we don’t want. I made some minor changes to it and this is what I came up with:

Five hundred years have passed since the humans went extinct at the hands of the fearsome and mysterious ‘Beasts’. The surviving races now make their homes up on floating islands in the sky, out of reach of all but the most mobile of Beasts. However, this new safe haven Regul Aire has a dark secret behind it.

Only a small group of young girls, the Leprechauns, can wield the ancient weapons needed to fend off invasions from these creatures. Into the girls’ unstable and fleeting lives, where a call to certain death could come at any moment, enters an unlikely character: a young man who lost everything five hundred years ago, the last living human awakened from a long, icy slumber. As he struggles to come to terms with his accursed fate and find his place in this hostile new world, he becomes the father that the girls never had. Together, through their everyday interactions in the ‘orphanage’, they gradually come to understand what family means and what is truly worth protecting.

I want to hint more at the father-daughter relationship, as opposed to romantic harem, and also the everyday life aspect, as opposed to fighting. Anyways, if you have any thoughts or suggestions let me know. Once I have something I’m satisfied with I’ll submit it to MAL and such.

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9 thoughts on “Shuumatsu’s Synopsis

  1. or you could just put “Oyabaka vs Brocon in 1000th summer” will pretty much sum it up in one sentense.
    tho I’m not sure about how it will end, but that’s the feel I get from it.

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  2. I like it as well, but I’m hesitant about the line “However, this new safe haven Regul Aire has a dark secret behind it.” since there wasn’t really that feeling up until the big reveal about them having to suicide nuke the Beasts to win, especially since the ambiguity of “call to certain death” only makes it hit in the later half of Vol1. It also feels out of place, something like being slotted in forcefully in the middle of the old synopsis and breaking it up.

    Although it might be nitpicky, would something like “As he struggles to come to terms with his accursed fate and find his place in this hostile new world, he stumbles into this secret of Regul Aire and becomes the father the girls never had.” work as well?

    Noticed you already updated the synopsis on the NU page with something a little different than this one. I also had doubts about the line “accursed fate and find his place in this hostile new world”, and I’m glad you added in that he can’t fight anymore.

    I thought mentioning the ‘Daughter’ and ‘orphanage’ might be changing the feeling of the reveals for new readers too much, so I came up with something here as well. Could it go “Willem struggles to come to terms with becoming the father that the girls never had, caring for and nurturing them even as he feels the pain of helplessly waiting for loved ones to return home that others once felt for him so long ago. Together, through their everyday interactions in this new home so like the one from his past, Willem and the girls gradually come to understand what family means and what is truly worth protecting.”

    Did you write up the old synopsis as well? I always thought it was poetic and fit the story nicely by giving almost nothing away and leaving readers to the mercy of the reveals. It’s a shame the current trends in writing made people misunderstand the premise of this story.

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    • Thanks for the suggestions. I will have a final version to try to get onto MAL before the anime starts. I also wrote the old synopsis and I liked it as well, but if it gave people the wrong idea that’s more important to me than sounding nice.

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